I Doodle, You ‘Ku 2013 – 05

The concept is simple: Here’s a doodle. Now write a poem to accompany it!

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31 thoughts on “I Doodle, You ‘Ku 2013 – 05

  1. Lucas says:

    new to town
    drifting from the depot
    with clouds in her pocket

  2. Rita Odeh says:

    the parallel lines
    of the railroad lines…
    missing you

  3. Lucas Marshall Stensland says:

    I wonder if
    anybody who lives here
    has ever seen
    Boondocks Saints II
    All Saints Day

  4. Cara Holman says:

    distant thunder
    the low rumble
    of an approaching train

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  6. GILLENA COX says:

    those days when the rails
    rumbled with the sweet smell of…
    burnt sugar canes loads

  7. signpost
    everything
    in the way

  8. hearing the trains in town . . .
    Lake Michigan icebergs

  9. beverlydyer says:

    Just out that window
    A path to the big wide world
    The next train passes.

  10. angie werren says:

    I hear it rolling
    ’round the bend –
    whispering wind moon

  11. this endless train
    across my teenage years
    tracks

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    Kailua, Hawaii
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    • tracks
      across my teenage years
      this endless train

      (just wondering on my keyboard)

      • angie werren says:

        this version takes me to a different place than the first. a sadder place, with a drug connotation to it (tracks). the first seems more wistful. like them both. :)

        • angie werren says:

          funny how the order changes things in my mind.

          • mahalo Angie, you are so right—tracks and endless train in the second one lead more easily to that drug connection for me too. . . . maybe less so in the first. interesting.

            I read recently the concept that with a good ku the meaning should remain the same when the first and third lines are exchanged. I’ve been playing with that and find I like what happens with the words when the ku works that way. until reading that, I used to see sometimes which way I preferred with the shift in meaning when those lines were switched. now I more often try to get the wording to work out so the meaning holds with that switching.

            fun. aloha

  12. polona says:

    my dream the night train screeching to a halt

  13. as we pass
    I wonder about their lives…
    nothing but stars

  14. Asni Amin says:

    the road is long
    and the journey still far …
    white butterfly

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  16. departing train
    mascara streaking
    down his cheeks

  17. not knowing
    when my heart
    will stop hurting
    the sound of the train
    plays over in my head

  18. correction:
    last line should be “keeps playing in my head”

    perhaps, this is a better one:

    not knowing
    if my heart will ever
    stop hurting . . .
    the train passes me by
    one more time

  19. Richard Cody says:

    Only passing through…
    Some places better
    left behind.

  20. sanjuktaa says:

    the railway track disappearing into the train’s whistle

    or,

    the railway track the length of the train’s whistle

  21. Maria Santomauro says:

    taking
    a train of no return-
    a soldier

  22. midnight train shaking my tail-feathers one more day

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